Prompt 034: No Fear

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

Title: No Fear
Author: Redrikki
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 100
Prompt: 034, Firefly: Rance Burgess
Characters: Petaline, Rance Burgess



Petaline had been so afraid for so long on account of this man. She’d fretted about what would happen when he came. Who would he kill? What would he take? It hadn’t always been like that. Back before, Rance Burgess had been just another dumb rancher with a sad little dick and a frigid wife. But he’d grown with her belly, bigger and bigger ‘til he was the almighty god-king of the moon. Now he was small again. Just another broken man lying in the dirt. Petaline turned in disgust. Imagine being afraid of that. She’d never be afraid again.

Comments

[ozma914.livejournal.com]

Well done; says a lot about both characters.

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

Thank you. Doesn't it just?

[laurtew.livejournal.com]

I like this. Very descriptive. The wording you use is very powerful. Good job!

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

Thank you.

[xlivvielockex.livejournal.com]

Your use of language in this is just...wow. I am not sure I can accurately describe just how fantastic it was. You really painted a great picture in just a few words.

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

::Blushes:: Aw, thanks.

[ubiquirk.livejournal.com]

I love the way you have her grow in power (just as Rance temporarily and artificially did)!

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

Thanks. That's actually what happens in the show. She suddenly goes from pregnant and mousy to killing the guy and running the joint.

[lauratd.livejournal.com]

Great job at capturing Petaline here. You got the Firefly folk-speak down.

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

Thanks. Writing Firefly-speak is always just so much fun.

[wereleopard58.livejournal.com]

a great look at the characters and beautifully written

[deird1]

I really liked this!