049 - ficlet - Haiku

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Title: Much fanku about death
Author: Maharet83
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 105
Prompt: 49 - Haiku
Characters: Jonathan, Tara, Angelus, Joyce, Anya, Buffy, Willow, Warren
AN: Haikus on the subject of death on BtVS



Killers they kill, dead men play
it is an artform
Angelus knows a fun game


Pale Joyce blankly stares
in the dead silence ribs crack
mommy wake up please, wake up


Rifts tear through the heavens
arms spread wide, leap to freedom
death is my gift (for now)


We miss Tara so much
white shirt splattered with red
couldn't they just skip it?


Bad deeds done doubly wrong
"please, I did wrong. I see that now!"
Willow bored now.


At the seal thinking back
Jonathan misses high school
he'll never leave again


To Anya's surprise
the end in no way included
any floppy hoppy bunnies

Comments

[deird1]

Clever.

I loved Buffy's death described as a "leap to freedom", the nice quoting of "just skip it?", and Jonathan and Anya's (just in general).

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Thanks! It was 'just skip it' that set off that entire haiku actually :)

[mary5958.livejournal.com]

These are really well done - and every single one of them puts pictures in my mind. Thank you for sharing.

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Glad you like :)

[redrikki.livejournal.com]

Very nice set with some really great turns of phrase. Hust one question, what is syllable pattern for Haikus?

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

5 - 7 - 5 :)

[dreamincolor.livejournal.com]

Wow. These were all really nice, the Tara and Joyce ones in particular tugged at my heart strings. Some of those lines were so perfect, like "Willow bored now" and the "(for now)."

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Awww thanks! Tugging is good :)

[lesbianbutch04.livejournal.com]

very well done... i love;

Rifts tear through the heavens
arms spread wide, leap to freedom
death is my gift (for now)

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Thanks. It's one of my faves too :)

[imbaskinrobbins.livejournal.com]

God, these are lovely. Buffy's especially gets to me.

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Glad to hear it :)

[thrace-adams.livejournal.com]

Damn these were good!!!

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

yay thanks!

[thedothatgirl.livejournal.com]

These were very good.

I found Jonathans & Anya's very poignant. Joyce's just heartbreaking.

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Thanks. That whole episode was just plain heartbreaking.

[ncvids.livejournal.com]

God, Anya's death would have been so much better with floppy hoppy bunnies.

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

hehe indeed it would have!

[firefly124.livejournal.com]

These are great, particularly Jonathan's.

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Glad to hear it :)

[(Anonymous)]

Hi,
great stuff, ranging from the delightful (Anya), to the sinister (Warren), with a sidetrip into heartbreaking (Buffy, Tara). Not a form I'm terribly familiar with, but you've made it work here.

Ray (kerkevik@planet-save.com)

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Thanks!

I saw your comments on a couple of other submissions. You should convert to LJ yourself. We don't bite ;)

[ubiquirk.livejournal.com]

The 2nd and 3rd are so poignant and the last is so funny! Great set!

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Glad you like!

[laisserais]

These were great! i think i liked jonathan's the most. joyce's was heartbreaking, and in a weird way, so way anya's. Great job!

[spankulert.livejournal.com]

Very glad you approve! Two other people posted haikus too, if you didn't chck them out yet :)

[laisserais]

i did check out the other haiku posts! and then i spread the love. *g* haikus are so much fun. and also hard.