ext_2544 ([identity profile] redrikki.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] still_grrr2008-03-07 09:13 pm

Prompt 056: Pretty Floral Bonnet

Title: Pretty Floral Bonnet
Author: Redrikki
Rating: PG
Word Count: 100
Prompt: 056
Characters: Mal, Jayne, Zoe



Mal tied the ribbon on the bonnet and readjusted his skirts so he could draw his gun without getting it tangled. “How do I look?” he asked, turning around.

“Like no woman I ever saw.”

“Aw, don’t pay Jayne no mind, sir,” reassured Zoe, her lips twitching like she was trying not to laugh. “You look very fetching.”

Mal pulled his dignity ‘round him like a shawl. “Just remember, it takes a real man to wear a dress.”

“What’re you talking ‘bout, Mal?” Jayne asked as they climbed into the wagon. “Dresses are nothing. It’s them shoes that’ll kill ya.”

[identity profile] thrace-adams.livejournal.com 2008-03-08 02:34 am (UTC)(link)
Oh this is awesome!

(Anonymous) 2008-03-08 11:38 am (UTC)(link)
Hi,
hard to pick out what I like best about this, but I think Jayne's closing line just edges it. Oh Jayne! Very, VERY, funny.

Thanks.

Ray (kerkevik@planet-save.com)

[identity profile] ubiquirk.livejournal.com 2008-03-09 04:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee! How funny, and even better that Jayne knows how women's shoes feel!

[identity profile] saracen77.livejournal.com 2008-03-11 11:23 am (UTC)(link)
This was lovely! Thank you!

I love the way Jayne just knows how those shoes are going to be! And that wearing dresses is easy? The man has way too much inside knowledge!

[identity profile] firefly124.livejournal.com 2008-03-14 02:28 am (UTC)(link)
“What’re you talking ‘bout, Mal?” Jayne asked as they climbed into the wagon. “Dresses are nothing. It’s them shoes that’ll kill ya.”

ROFLMAO!!

Great double-take line!